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That Good Story by Andy Latex
« on: September 26, 2017, 09:35:50 AM »
You can view the story here on the plaza:

http://www.latexstories.net/storiessz/thatgoodstory.html
Solo-F; F+/f; club; latex; waitress; stage; display; honey; tub; interview; reveal; aliens;  bond; mast; torment; entertainment; worms; swallow; cocooned; milked; scifi; capture; horror; timetravel; cons/nc; X

Please feel free to leave your kind comments & feedback here about this story.

Thanks   ;)

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Re: That Good Story by Andy Latex
« Reply #1 on: September 26, 2017, 02:08:39 PM »
Awesome.
So much packed in there, so many sexy ideas and details.

I can see the steps that led to this story, but there's still a huge leap from the jumping-off point to that finished product.
I seem to be spoiled for good stories just now, but this has reset my expectations to a higher level, I honestly can't gush enough over it :)

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Re: That Good Story by Andy Latex
« Reply #2 on: September 28, 2017, 01:02:21 PM »
Hello Amyamy
  Thank you so much for your comment, It is very when people sent their feed back and ideas. I have not written long form stories for a while now, but very much enjoyed doing so.
  Please feel free to visit my blog where you will find lots of other stories in the same area.

   Thank you again
XXX
Andy

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Re: That Good Story by Andy Latex
« Reply #3 on: September 28, 2017, 04:49:31 PM »
Hey Andy!

I am a big fan of your new latex story. The pacing was nice and the timetravel plot device was really interesting. The idea of female humanoids in shiny glossy black skin is really exciting and I hope you can explore them further in the future.

This is truly a unique story that I have never seen before in your work. Hope we can see more of that in the future.


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Re: That Good Story by Andy Latex
« Reply #4 on: September 29, 2017, 01:20:08 AM »
That time-travel trick was a great idea. It solved an ever-present problem in erotic fiction:

As a writer, you want to show events from the protagonist's view-point, and describe their inner experiences, but that point-of-view prevents legitimate use of the kind of external description that the reader needs to clearly visualize the situation.

This lingering difficulty tends to result in:

a) head-hopping
b) point-of-view violations where the protagonist is magically able to see things they couldn't possible see
c) a peculiar excess of convenient mirrors and reflective surfaces
d) the 'camera' cliche, where a camera feed of the scene is fed back to the protagonist
e) re-telling the scene again from another character's point of view

The viewer-only time-travel is a neat way around it, though would probably lose its appeal if over used.
It's also problematic, in that it can raise questions in the reader as to what else might be viewed this way, and wasn't, and why not?
In a longer story, it would probably lead to such questions. Another down-side, is that it can confuse readers who are simply skimming, and looking for the sexy bits. This wasn't likely to be a problem in this case, as it was all sexy :)

I believe this device has been used before, but not often. I think past uses were also more plot heavy, and less about a straight-forward point-of-view device.

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Re: That Good Story by Andy Latex
« Reply #5 on: September 29, 2017, 12:35:42 PM »
Hi trashisme and thank you
      Hi  AmyAmy,
             Hi    John and thank you too
  Thank you for your feedback. I am so glad you all like the timetravel element of this story, it took a long time to work out the points from which to shift the time frame, but eventually i hope it all made sense.
  All your points a very well thought Out Amy and I shall have to visit your stories. I like to condense my stories and if I can edit away any unnecessary exposition and allow the reader to fill in the blanks with their own imaginations that works for me.
  The various method of viewing ones own future are as you say cliche and old hat, So i set out to have Selina experience some and see the rest, from a position of helplessness, so I had to get the jumping off and on points just right.
  The whole story was inspired by Rubbermatts work on Deviant art and in particular this https://rubbermatt.deviantart.com/art/Wurmed-631468084

ps did anyone get the in joke with the name Selina Kaplinsky?

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Andy

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« Reply #6 on: October 02, 2017, 01:07:43 PM »
Nice Try Trashisme
  It is actually the first and second names of my favourite TV news readers when I was young
Selina Scott
https://www.pinterest.co.uk/pin/381891243384939270/
Natasha Kapilinsky
https://www.pinterest.co.uk/pin/344736546458938407/
XXX